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With a growing work population one of the most pressing issues is that of feeding such a larger number of people. some people think that GM foods offer a viable solution to this problem. To what extent do you agree or siagree?

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As
 the world population keeps increasing, many countries are facing serious problems with
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 supply. Some
people
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 believe that genetically modified
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 can be a good way to solve
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 issue. I partly agree with
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 idea because
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foods
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 have both advantages and disadvantages. On the one hand,
GM
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foods
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 can help produce more
food
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 in a shorter time. These
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 are often made to grow faster and resist diseases or bad weather, which can lead to more crops and less loss.
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, farmers can grow rice or wheat that survives in dry or hot conditions, so there is less chance of
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 shortages.
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 can be very useful for feeding a large population, especially in poor countries.
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, there are concerns about the safety and long-term effects of
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foods
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. Some
people
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 are worried that these
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 might not be healthy for humans, and there is not enough research to be sure they are safe.
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, using
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 crops might hurt the environment because they could reduce biodiversity or cause problems for other plants and animals.
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, many
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 do not trust companies that make
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 seeds, as they are often big corporations that want to control
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 production.
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 could be risky for small farmers who depend on these companies. In conclusion,
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foods
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 can help increase
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 production and may be a useful way to deal with the growing number of
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 in the world.
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, there are
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 problems that must be considered carefully. I believe
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foods
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 can be part of the solution, but we
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 need other methods like reducing
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 waste and supporting traditional farming.

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