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The governments should give each citizen a basic income so that they have enough money to live on, even if they are unemployed. To what extent do you agree or disagree? N.B: Reported on IELTS January 17th

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The inhabitants of the cities should be provided sufficiency by the
government
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 for their living needs,
also
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 it is
improtant
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important
people
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 who are facing unemployment in order to survive.I do not completely disagree
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this
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 point.
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, nowadays unemployment is so common among most
people
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 which leads
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to difficult
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difficult
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 to live on. So
people
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 should be given livelihood by the
government
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. I find it is one of the responsibilities of the
government
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. Because the authorities have to protect their inhabitants. In turn, giving sufficient money to
people
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 who has a need, can avoid starvation among the poor.
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 that,
this
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 method can create
loyality
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loyalty
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instance
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 if the locals feel safe and they are supported by the country, they will have more tendency of
loyality
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loyalty
 to it.
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result
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 there will be an increase
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in
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the numbers
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numbers
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 of patriots.
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, every person has to try hard for himself even it is challenging , he never ought to
wait
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 someone's support or help. All should find
job
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a job
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 if they are unemployed and work hard for their life
necissities
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necessities
. Because waiting someone's support can cause less activeness or
people
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 have no efficiency
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 of working
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 it may be impossible to have an improvement.
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Also
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 it has an influence
for
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on
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 the
government
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 because of less
labor
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labour
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 force. . In conclusion, providing
people
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 with
basic
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a basic
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 income to survive especially those in need, is one of the responsibilities of
country
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the country
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However
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 it should be moderation and it should not lead
any
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to any
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 catastrophic consequences.
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