Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with?

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Advertising plays an active role in our society.It is a way to know about the

products

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that we do not know about.We can know the very helpful

products

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from home

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we see

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ad on

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or mobile phone or

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in any

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newspaper or magazine. Some people say that advertising encourages them to buy things that they really do not need to purchase.As I agree with the point of view,sometimes we are just sitting in our house and scrolling our mobile phone and we find an ad about any stuff that we really do not need but we like that

product

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and want to add to our life so we are very curious to buy that brand.Many times we were very impressed with the

product

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that is

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advertised or maybe the results of the

product

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that is

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shown in the ad and we want to try as it is true or not.As we are human

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we cannot control our minds and wishes.Humans want everything in their lives.So the point of view of some people is true that advertising plays an active role

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in buying

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things that we actually do not need. On the other side,

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advertising

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is really helpful for us,as we do not know about everything and every

product

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.There are so many good

products

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available in the market but through , the advertisement we come to know about these helpful

products

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,in the

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market,

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there comes a lot of winter stuff in the winter season,through advertisement we come to know about the sales going on the

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and we buy them at fewer prices as

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to others.

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coherence cohesion

Improve the overall structure of the essay by ensuring that it has a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. Each paragraph should focus on a single main idea and connect logically to the next.

task achievement

Develop a more balanced consideration of both viewpoints in response to the prompt. Provide more specific examples and details to support your ideas and ensure that your points directly address the task question.

Fully explain your ideas

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Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

Sentence 1 - Summary
Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

270 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

encourage
persuade
manipulative
unnecessary
excessive
artificial needs
desires
consumers
oversaturation
impulse buying
financial problems
inform
educate
features
benefits
innovations
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positive behavior
enrich
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Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with?

Fully explain your ideas

As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many people believe that the priority of the government should be to ensure a growing economy. While others believe that the government should focus its efforts on uplifting the less fortunate? Discuss both views.

Some people think that in order to be successful in business one has to study at university, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Traffic congestion is a worldwide problem for urban populations. What are some of the causes of this problem and what measures can be taken to address it? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.