Some people say that shops should sell the food products of local markets whenever possible, rather than importing from abroad. Do you agree or disagree?

In recent centuries, the advances in transportation made
possible
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it possible
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to market abroad
products
in local markets. While
this
situation has some advantages, it includes many drawbacks for national development. İn
this
essay, I will
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discuss
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discus
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discuss
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possible
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consequences of increasing abroad marketing. There are several advantages of reaching abroad imported
products
.
Firstly
, it provides variable
products
you can choose which is not produced in your own country.
For instance
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tropical fruits could not be produced in northern countries and they are dependent
to
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on
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abroad importation for
this
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these
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products
.
On the other hand
, free marketing is essential for some countries where farming opportunities are limited.
Besides
, there are some disadvantages of abroad importing of
food
products
.
To begin
with, selling
local
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locally
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produced
food
products
of local markets decreases the dependency
to
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on
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other countries and saves own resources.
Furthermore
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local trading supports local farmers and microeconomy.
In addition
marketing of local
food
products
does not be affected
from
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by
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political and economical changes
of
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in
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other states.
For
example
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currency changes at the origin of the
food
product generally
determines
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determine
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the cost of the
products
.
This
condition consequences price destabilization. In
conclusion
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selling
food
products
of local markets has several advantages while it has some disadvantages. In my
opinion
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local marketing provides
long standing
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economical improvement.
Instead
of free marketing,
selling
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the selling
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of
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apply
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local
food
products
may lead
wealth
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to wealth
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for citizenship.
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