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Internet should be used for children. Do you agree?

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There are people who believe
children
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 should be allowed to be able to use the
internet
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.
Although
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 the
internet
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 is useful in many ways,
children
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 are very vulnerable and their access to the
internet
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 is better to be restricted. The worldwide web is a phenomenon of the 21st century that has some advantages for
children
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.
First
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 of all, the
internet
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 is playing a major role in the world today and
children
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 ought to be instructed how to use the
internet
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 like all other lessons they are taught at school,
otherwise
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, what they learn would be useless as everything including everyday chores are related to
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 technology now and in future.
Besides
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,
children
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 are very curious and eager to learn new facts about the world around them and teachers and parents are not always able to answer all of the questions they ask,so it would be a great chance for them to find out everything they would like to know through the mysterious world of
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 and burgeon their talents.
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, despite the fact that the
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 has some advantages for adolescents, it is immature to let them use the
internet
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 without the supervision of their guardians.To
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,
children
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 could be easily a victim of cybercrime or even become potential criminals on the dark web.
For example
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, a thirteen-year-old boy has hacked the CIA ( Central Intelligence Agency) and more than hundreds of gigabytes of data has been compromised which affected millions of Americans' safety since
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.
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, Mafia and paedophiles are always there to take advantage of a child using the
internet
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 which its effects are irreversible and could affect whole his life. In conclusion, the
internet
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 has some advantages for
children
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 in order to grow their talents and knowledge through it.
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, their access to
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 technology should be restricted as they are vulnerable to criminal activities taking place there.

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