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Many students choose to take a gap year before starting university, to travel or gain work experience. Do you think this is a good idea or a waste of time?

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The question of whether taking a break for a year after high school for travelling or gaining experience is becoming increasingly controversial. In my opinion, it is a significant chance to explore the world at a young age and deeply understand what sphere of activity is the most wishful and desirable. There are numerous advantages of spending a year before graduating from
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university on something except studying. It's a unique opportunity in
life
 to choose a lifestyle without any restrictions.
Although
,
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this
 way does not include studying, it could be at some point. Travelling is broad the worldview and helps the youth understand the diversity of the world.
In addition
, it is a chance to extend the circle of acquaintances that could be useful for
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 future career.
For instance
, it is could be a business partner with knowledge of another language and features of the country. Another undoubted benefit is a chance to recognize better which of the
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 to choose
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continuous. In fact, in our everyday
life
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 we don't have enough time to ask ourselves what we are interested in the most.
Furthermore
, it could be one of the most bright memory with all the chances to come back to it throughout
the
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 whole
life
. In the conclusion, the recent tendency to take a break in the middle of the school and university periods of
life
 is looking very attractive. In my opinion, everyone should take
this
 opportunity to explore the world and get unforgettable memories.
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