Young people who commit serious crimes such as robbery or violent attacks should be punished in the same way as adults. To what extend do you agree or disagree

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It has been said that youngsters should be punished in the same manner as adults,while committing crimes,

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as attacks, and robbery. I partially agree with

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statement, and the points supporting my view would be discussed in

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essay. Some believe that equal penalties should be given to adolescents due to the following reasons.

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and foremost,

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should be given regardless of age and gender, because providing leniency to one group will somehow reduce the fear of penalty in others.

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, when the juvenile criminal of Abhaya gang rape case in Delhi, was sent to a rehabilitation centre merely for 3 months and later got released, many teenagers realized the loopholes in the Indian judiciary, which encouraged them to commit more crimes.

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considerations would be unfair to the victims, since they will not be compensated properly for their financial, emotional and mental loss. In the contrast to the above, young people make violence, as they are immature and influenced by external factors,

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as TV

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and video games.

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, it is evident that adolescents who watch

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having more violence are more likely to develop criminal behaviour.

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, one should control the content of the program,rather than

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, counselling

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or proper education should be imparted as

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, so that they can differentiate between wrong and right actions in their future life. To conclude, of late, many youths are involved in criminal activities.

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, it is considered that the same

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should be provided for them, similar to adults.

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, I believe circumstances should be considered while punishing them, and counselling

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should be imparted along with

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