A rise in the standard of living in a country often only seems to benefit cities rather than rural areas. What problems can this cause? How might these problems be reduced?

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The rise in living standards in the countries is developing day by day is growing.
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is will not benefit only rural areas but
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cities
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can cause any problem but there are many
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to reduce it. Nowadays, more attention is paid to
cities
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than
rural
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a rural
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area
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. Due to people from abroad
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cities
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, not villages. It is
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the case
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that increasing living standard in a country seems to be more substantial for
cities
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rather than non-urban areas.
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result
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many rural residents have to move to
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. In these
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cities
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industrial construction
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for new jobs and
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, it is providing employment to many rural resident villagers. So the number of people in
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city will
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and people will need a place to live.
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, new housing will be built. Industrial construction is lead to growth and it helps for
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developing
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of the
cities
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, attention to the village is declining and lifestyle growth of the village is
decrising
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decreasing
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. In conclusion,
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situation can put residents at some disadvantages,
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, I believe a number of solutions can address them.
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