Some people feel that paparazzi should not follow celebrities and invade their privacy by taking pictures of them everywhere, while others believe this is just the price of fame.  Discuss both sides and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • invasion of privacy
  • personal space
  • media scrutiny
  • mental health
  • public figures
  • relentless pursuit
  • legal implications
  • ethical considerations
  • tabloid journalism
  • financial gain
  • public interest
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