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Some people feel that paparazzi should not follow celebrities and invade their privacy by taking pictures of them everywhere, while others believe this is just the price of fame.  Discuss both sides and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#people #paparazzi #celebrities #privacy #pictures #price #fame
In recent years, many cities have been developing than rural places and many
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number of difficulties caused by differences in increase levels in a country. A rush to urban areas is one of these, aggravating difficulties in rural areas
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infrastucture
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infrastructure
. Valuable regional industries and
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agriculture
 may be left to whither and unemployment in cities may raise, possibly harmonizing with greater crime levels. The development of a
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 economy may
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government led
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 action. Regional development schemes can encourage
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businesses
 to invest in rural areas and improve
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infrastructure
 in these places.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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