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A rise in the standard of living in a country often only seems to benefit cities rather than rural areas. What problems can this cause? How might these problems be reduced?

#rise #country #benefit #cities #areas
Nowadays ,
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government
governments
goverment
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are
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 trying to improve the lifestyle of their
country
 .
This
 situation
have
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 more
adventages
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advantages
 to the urban
areas
 rather than rural
areas
 . In
this
 essay , l will try to explain the problems of these situations with their solutions. It is true that
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improvements in a
country
 have more benefits to the citizens . Because , people have more opportunities to live in comfort from comfortable transport system , new buildings and fabrics in cities .
However
 , these improvements could be
threat
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lifestyle
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the lifestyle
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whose
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living
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 in
city
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the city
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 . Cause , there are problems
such
 as increasing traffic
jam
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 and air pollution from new fabrics . People of rural
areas
 may want to move to the urban
areas
 when cities have been developed and
then
 ,
countrysides
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 might
be became
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 less productive . In conclusion , it seems to me that revolution of the standard living in a
country
 may have problems to
country
 but I believe government should take a measure to solve these issues .
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