A rise in the standard of living in a country often only seems to benefit cities rather than rural areas. What problems can this cause? How might these problems be reduced?

It's true that the gap between the city and village dwellers standards in many regions of the world. Every
countries
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to
benefit
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cities
than
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more than
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rural
areas
.
In
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this
essay discusses, what are reasons and how
be
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solved
in
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this
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problems. Many
cities
of the world are benefiting an
ever increasing
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economic and trade facilities. There are a lot of improved roads, hospitals, schools and parks in urban
areas
which improve the lifestyle of the city dwellers.
Similarly
, more businesses and more job opportunities are located in
cities
.
This
results in the migration of people from rural
areas
to
cities
for better living.
In villages
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have many problems in education and medical systems. That's why people moved to
cities
.
This
situation
lead
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to pollution in city
areas
.Certainly,
this
migrate
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creates more noise, air pollution
to
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the urban location.
Second
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the countrysides have lack of job,
this
means most people moved to developed area. I think
this
situation will be changed.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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