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the number of the population in one European country between 1950 and 2050.

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The graph illustrates the number of the population in one European country between 1950 and 2050. Starting in 1950, there was a steep increase in the
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rate
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,reaching its peak at 100000
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 in 1970 .
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, following 1970 the
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 of
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 dropped dramatically, with a low point of just under 60000
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 in 1990. The
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 major change came following 1990, when its
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 again increased slightly, rising to around 70000
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 in 2010.From that point onwards, the
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 of
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 showed a significant fall, with the number at just over 60000
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 in 2050.
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, there was a slight increase in the
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 of
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 until around 1970 but a sharp decrease to around 70000
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 in 2030.
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, the remaining years witnessed the
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 rising, reaching its peak at 80000
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 in 2050. Overall, it can be said that in 1950 the
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 was higher than the
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. In contrast, the
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 outnumbered the
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 in 2050.
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