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The graph illustrates the information of
price
 in global food and oil over 11 years period from 2000 to 2011. As an overview, the most noticeable is both the average
price
 of food and oil provided a similar trend which was a significant increase from 2000 before reaching its peak in 2008,
then
 dramatically dropped in 2009 and went up again in 2011. According to the average oil
price
 per barrel, remaining steady in 2000 to 2003 approximately $25, gradually rose above $40, $50 in 2004 and 2005 respectively. The
peakest
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peaks
peak
speakest
price
 was presented in 2008 for almost $120. On contrary, the trend enormous decreased to $40 in the year later and
consequently
 up again in 2010 and 2011 which around $100.
On the other hand
, the food
price
 index provided the least in the beginning at 90 points, the trends maintained at the same level until 2005 which was over 120 units and rocketed two times around 240 points in 2008.
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 by a downward trend in 2009 at 140 points before hitting the top point at 250 in 2011.
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