It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction

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Some argue that it is important to punish
children
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at an early
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in order to teach the distinction between right and wrong. I agree with
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opinion as long as the punishment is fitted for their development.
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essay will present the arguments as to why I agree with
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matter and what kind of punishment apply teachers and
parents
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can use for disciplining their
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.
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, the moral development of
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is developed from an early
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,
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, it is indispensable to educate them on how they should behave in society through discipline. According to
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my knowledge, at an early
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,
children
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learnt moral ethics from their environments’ responses.
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, if their
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respond negatively, i.g. mad orangy at them, because they stole cookies,
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they learnt that stealing is an unacceptable behaviour proving punishments are indeed effective to stop their unfavourable behaviours.
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, these rules could
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affect the appropriate one.
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, if their peers mock them because they study too hard, they could stop studying altogether.
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, it is easier to shape
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's behaviours than adults. Modifying adults' behaviour will take much more effort because adults are not easily influenced by their environment because of their developed cognition. Meanwhile, according to one of the psychology theories, educating
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could involve the mechanism of rewards and punishments.
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should reinforce good behaviours with delightful rewards,
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as sweets, toys, and many more along with punishing them with dislikable things,
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as refraining them from playing games in a certain period of time. From these explanations,
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and teachers indeed should educate their
children
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about morals at an early
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through discipline.
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, the discipline
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has to include the rewards when they showed appropriate behaviour because moral is about right or wrong, not just the ‘wrong’ ones.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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