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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graphs illustrate the proportion of households using the electrical appliance
also
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 and the number of
hours
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which
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that
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 owners spend their time doing
housework
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 in a
week
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 from 1920 to 2019.
Overall
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, the percentage of usage with electrical appliances tends to increase from the past
while
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 in 2019, people spend lesser
hours
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 doing
housework
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 in comparison to 1920. There was a significant growth
of
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in
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 usage
in
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of
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 the refrigerator, starting from zero in 1920 and increasing to around 55% in 1940,
then
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 climbing up to 100% in 1980 by leaps and bounds.
Whereas
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, the usage of vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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 has increased considerably from 30% in 1920 to 100% in 2000 and remains stable. For washing
machine
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machines
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, it rose gradually from 40% to 70% in 1960
then
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 had a slight drop in1980 and increased continuously until 2019.
On the contrary
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, the tendency in the number of
housework
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 during the
week
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is
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apply
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going down from 50
hours
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 per
week
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 in 1920 to 10
hours
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 per
week
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 in 2019. In conclusion, it can be seen that both trends are going opposite sides, one is going uptrend, yet one is going downtrend.
Thus
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, the
hours
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 of
housework
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 are dominated by
the
Correct article usage
apply
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electrical appliance.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, housework, week with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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