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Some people think that physical strength is important for success in sport, while other people think that mental strength is more important. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Strength
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 has always been an important part of any
sport
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, and
strength
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 is usually divided into two parts physical and mental. I believe that the combination of both physical and mental
strength
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 plays an important part while playing a
sport
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. The physical
strength
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 of an individual in a
sport
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 helps the said individual in a variety of ways,
for example
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: when we play
cricket
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 and a player has a good amount of physical
strength
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, he can smash the
cricket
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ball
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 as hard as he wants to and hit the
ball
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 out of the ground every single time for six runs, which is the highest that one can get from one
ball
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, whereas whilst balling when a lot of physical
strength
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 is used he
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she can throw the
ball
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 at an astronomical pace which will, in turn, produce a wicket and that will be beneficial for his
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her team.
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, if we talk about mental
strength
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 it is
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 as important as physical
strength
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 in any
sport
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.
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, in ,
cricket
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 if the player does not have mental
strength
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 whilst balling he
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she may not be able to bowl in the right areas which might produce wickets, as
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 required to win a
cricket
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 match.
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, if any player does not possess the mental
strength
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 while batting he
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she may not be able to time the
ball
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 which in turn will lead to the downfall of his wicket and his
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her team could lose the
cricket
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 match. So in conclusion, we can say that though some people believe that only physical
strength
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 is important for success or only mental
strength
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 is important for success in any
sport
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, I believe that it is the combination of both mental and physical
strength
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,
that is
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 required to succeed in any sports.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • physical conditioning
  • athleticism
  • physical training
  • muscle strength
  • mental resilience
  • psychological preparedness
  • mental toughness
  • confidence
  • precision
  • focus
  • mental strategies
  • mental fortitude
  • brute strength
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