Some educationalists say that every child should be taught how to play a musical instrument. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Some teaching experts believe that all
children
ought to learn
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play
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musical instruments. I strongly agree with
this
idea because I think
music
require more attention,
also
music
is able to help
children
for choosing the field of study correctly and create a better life.
To begin
with, entire the world, schools pay more attention to other various types of science
such
as mathematics, experimental science and engineering technology. It seems that
music
is an underrated subject among people.
For instance
, most parents desire their
kids
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study
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engineering and medicine to
becoming
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engineers or doctors to attain suitable jobs and earn massive money in the future. Parents think if
children
spend
time
in art, they will not be successful people. While probably success is not only mean
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great
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occupation and income and it is insufficient. For fully satisfaction interest is
more
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significant issue compared to those subjects which recently has been mentioned.
Therefore
, schools and individuals should
to
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allocate a regular and remarkable
time
in calendars to educate how to play musical instruments for discovered real interest.
Furthermore
,
music
assists
children
to attain mental relaxation. When kids go to school and spend too much
time
doing assignments after that, definitely expose to exhausting moments which can decline the quality of their performance and need some
time
to recover, For
this
purpose playing a musical instrument is able to help them.
For example
, I have played
guitar
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for becoming calm since I was an adolescent, it has been a brilliant procedure for me to cope with problems. In conclusion,
however
, there are some
children
and parents who do not enthusiastic to learn about musical instruments, it can assist kids in order to select appropriate the field of study,
in addition
, it can help them to relax.
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