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Computers are becoming an essential part of education. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages.

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In recent times,
computers
 are widely used in education. In my opinion, using the computer will help people to get more information in a short period of time. In
this
 essay, I will be discussing the
advantages
 and disadvantages of using
computers
 for learning. Below I have listed a couple of
advantages
 of using the system in education.
Firstly
, it will help
students
 to get and process more complex problems in a short period of time. Today only
computers
 are used to build artificial intelligence models,
although
,
students
 can learn theoretical concepts using books it is hard to process the information using paper and pen. So
computers
 play a vital role in day to day life of a student.
Secondly
, it will facilitate
students
 to learn academics through online classes. In recent times, especially during pandemics, we would have noticed only
computers
 are widely used to attend online classes.
Also
, these systems played a vital role for
students
 to access study materials using e-library or through the internet. Apart from the above
advantages
, we do have some disadvantages of using the computer in the educational system. The primary disadvantage is,
such
 usage of high processing machines results in
students
 are not focusing on learning the fundamentals of the subject. Nowadays we see even for simple mathematical calculations
students
 use either calculator or computer. The secondary disadvantage is,
students
 are misusing the machines. Often, we see
students
 purchase the machine for educational use, but, most of the time it is used for surfing the internet and playing games. sometimes it is hard to monitor the activity of the
students
 if the parents are technically strong. To conclude,
computers
 play a key role in everyone's life.
Although
, it has its own
advantages
 and disadvantages we should always make use of it for goodwill.
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