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The following diagrams show how a pellet stove and a pellet boiler work to heat a house

The following diagrams show how a pellet stove and a pellet boiler work to heat a house
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The diagrams below show information on a
pellet
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 stove and a
pellet
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 boiler utilized in generating heat for a house.
Overall
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 the
pellet
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 stove process uses
wood
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pellets
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 to generate hot air
to
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in
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 the house by burning them. In the meantime, the
pellet
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 boiler provides heat by having a hot stream from
wood
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pellets
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 as fuel to boil the cold water into hot streams. It can be seen that a
wood
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pellets
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 stove process starts with putting the
wood
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 pill into the fuel hopper and is fed to the combustion chamber.
Subsequently
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, as excrements are burned, their ashes are dropped
to
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into
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 the ash pan beneath,
then
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 the hot air from
flame
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the flame
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 moves through combustion, and the exhaust duct extruded dirty air from the above rear panel. Meanwhile, the
wood
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pellets
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 boiler has cold water to heat
in
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apply
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the furnace that has wooden
excrements
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excrement
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 as firewood.
Then
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, the ash receptacle beside keeps the ash from there. After that, smog moves through the smokestack out of the house. After the cold water is boiled into hot streams,
finally
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, it is sent to the living room and bedrooms afterwards.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pellet, wood, pellets with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "moves" was used 2 times.
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