You have just spent a weekend at a friend's house. When you returned home, you discovered that you had left a coat there. There are some important belongings in the pockets. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter explain that you have left the coat there say what the coat looks like, where you think you left it and what was in the pockets make some suggestions about how to get all of your belongings back

Dear Monil, I hope
this
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letter finds you and your family in good health. I really enjoyed my time at your place
last
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weekend. By the way, I am writing to let you know that during my visit, I forgot my winter
coat
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and didn't realise until I reached home. On the evening of my
last
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day at your place, I remember I was gathering all my belongings to pack them up, and I think I hung my jacket behind the door of my room. And upon leaving, I forgot to wear it and didn't realise, as the weather was slightly warmer than the day I came to your home. Anyway, it's a Mountain Warehouse blue colored puffed winter
coat
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which was left behind the door, and it has all my bank cards and my dead Apple Watch in the pocket. As you know, those things are essential in my life.
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, how about you deliver my
coat
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and the belongings in the pocket to my home address through express courier service so that I get my stuff as quickly as possible.
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, you can cover the costs using my Visa card
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was left in one of the pockets. Waiting for your response and my
coat
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. Yours lovingly, Ketul Shah

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coherence
Make your ideas clear and easy to follow. Add a bit more detail about how you felt about losing your coat.
cohesion
Check your paragraphs. Each one should focus on one main idea. You did well but could be a little clearer in some parts.
positive
Your greeting and closing are very friendly and warm, which is great for a letter to a friend!
positive
You described the coat and its contents well, making it easy for your friend to understand what you need back.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
Topic Vocabulary:
  • appreciation
  • accidentally
  • distinctive features
  • fabric
  • inner/outer pockets
  • courier service
  • parcels
  • reimburse
  • inconvenience
  • affectionately
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