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In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food

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The growth of
people
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 is suffering from health problems because of eating too much fast
food
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.
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, many
people
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 support the idea
that is
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 governments should impose a higher
tax
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 on fast
food
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. From my point of view, I agree with
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 viewpoint for many reasons, described in the following paragraphs before the conclusion is reached. It is undeniable that fast
food
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 is one of the most popular kinds of
food
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 because consumption is more convenient to eat and cheaper than others.
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, the population, who consume too much fast
food
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, will have some health issues easier than other populations.
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, the authorities should pay attention to
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 topic because of the increasing deaths of citizens from fast
food
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.
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, almost of
people
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 want to keep their money for their purposes, so imposing a higher
tax
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 will make citizens do not need to eat a lot of fast
food
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.
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,
this
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 solution can help the part of the country's economy.
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, if some
people
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 need to buy
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 kind of
food
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, they will spend a lot of money which is the
tax
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.
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,
this
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tax
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 is used for developing their homey.
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, the authorities will spend
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 money for renovating some public transportations or giving some scholarships for underprivileged teenagers as every teenager is the group of
people
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 who leads their homeys to a good way in the future. To conclude, I strongly agree with the necessity for the governments to impose a higher
tax
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 on fast
food
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 as it seems to me that the advantages of
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 topic outweigh the disadvantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • heart disease
  • health outcomes
  • healthcare costs
  • consumer behavior
  • socio-economic backgrounds
  • ethical implications
  • public health campaigns
  • subsidies
  • regulations
  • nutritional content
  • healthier food options
  • government intervention
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