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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research business and the academic world others believe that some information is too important too or two valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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The importance of most public trust that it is better to provide as much data as we can in experiment invention cooperation and schooling globe while many thaughts that much knowledge is too necessary too or 2 Essential to be spread without disturbance which was always debatable has now become more controversial with many people claiming
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 beneficial while others reject
this
 notion. The substantial influence of
this
trend
 has sparked controversy over the potential impact in recent years. In my ,opinion former proportions appear to be more rational.
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 essay will
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 elaborate on both the positive and negative effects of
this
trend
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Thus
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further
 explain
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argument
 but the preponderant one stem from the fact that that helps to develop the nation and get a chances to know about various things another pivotal aspect of
this
argument
 is that it improves our general capacity needless to say theses merit stand in good stead. ,
However
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 there are some pitfalls that negate
this
argument
 which certainly overwhelm the potential influence of
this
trend
 but one of the most alarming ones is that may be someone on use it wrongly that leads to a chance for disturbance
besides
 by using
this
 kind of education they may create harmful equipment
such
 as gun bom
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 everything should not be transferred with everyone Instrumental indeed. ,
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 its potential drawbacks should not be overlooked either.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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