Crime appears to be rising in most countries in the world, especially among young people. What the possible causes of this trend, and what solutions would be effective reducing crime
A young person has been rising
crime
in some countries. Why do teens commit a crime
how could help them.
The factors that contribute to juvenile Change the punctuation
?
crime
, leading to them
Correct pronoun usage
apply
to
dangerous situations must be found. Change preposition
apply
In the
Change preposition
The
first,
factors may drive
by peer pressure. They go through a number of changes in their adolescence. Getting influenced by their peer behavior most teens get involved in a risky activity. In the second poor socioeconomic status, family income affects the quality in which Wrong verb form
be driven
children
and
grow up. Correct word choice
apply
Thirdly
neglectful parents did not pay strong attention to their children
. Some problem
their parents divorced Reducing Fix the agreement mistake
problems
crime
effective schools Teachers taught differentiate
between right and wrong, they can be more careful choosing the path for themselves. Add the particle
to differentiate
likewise
, Rephrase
Similarly
Ministry
of Correct article usage
the Ministry
education
provide primary schools Capitalize word
Education
free
training courses, seminar about ethics, Change preposition
with free
take
care Wrong verb form
taking
every
other, Change preposition
of every
supporting
classmate Correct word choice
and supporting
friends
. It is Correct word choice
and friends
need
Correct article usage
a need
practice
caring for others and being Fix the infinitive
to practice
greatful
. Correct your spelling
grateful
On the other hand
, parents should be
more attention towards their studies and Verb problem
pay
spent
Wrong verb form
spend
free
time Correct pronoun usage
their free
and talk
aboutWrong verb form
talking
openly
their problems. To summarize, Rephrase
apply
children
are Correct article usage
the basic
basic
of developing our country. It’s very important to hear your Replace the word
basis
children
. Raising a caring respectful, ethical child is and always has been hard work, but it is something all of us can do. And no work is more important or ultimately more rewarding.Submitted by alexstudyin on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite