Crime appears to be rising in most countries in the world, especially among young people. What the possible causes of this trend, and what solutions would be effective reducing crime?

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many young people are getting into crimes, the
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becomes a juvenile delinquent.
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includes Europe and the rest of Asia. It appears that there are two main problems, but
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some other ways to teach them good morals and emotion. Perhaps the major factor issue is poor
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and morals, which is the school is the only place where
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get good knowledge and primary
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. Thailand is a prime example,
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, the schools offer many courses, especially
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involvement, and crime behaviors these seminars open up your eyes make closely see the reality, but they
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not pay attention to their studies,
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seminars, spend time in leisure activities, so 20% of their
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children ignorant, and there become one of the crimes. Another major problem is linked to their family base the parent`s neglect violence, alcohol, and lack of time they care about only themself.
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, most people think they can change their bad habits into good. Turning to possible solutions, the biggest step would be for the government to improve their level of
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, and
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more focus on
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children.
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, the school,
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should work together to foster a sense of community and create a few good behavior clubs.
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, the parents have to be more close to their children and have a daily meal to the family importance is being together. The nationality research shows that
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.
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, the
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caused are both
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and family, and the solutions will require
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action by
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, and parents.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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