Crime appears to be rising in most countries in the world, especially among young people. What the possible causes of this trend, and what solutions would be effective reducing crime.

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increasing among
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young people. There are many things
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involved in
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situation, but how
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are we react
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properly? There are a number of problems
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more affected.Perhaps the major problem
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married and have a baby. A second issue is there is a lack of educational
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and responsibilities to influence students. The social network is very loose in our country and there is no age limit. A
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problem is
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family divorces increased.
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society is getting single mothers, insecure children and low
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moral
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. Turning to possible solutions, the biggest step would be to improve parents
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high responsibility to their children
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more and
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issues together is important. Parents and teachers work together to teach
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social and
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lessons…… create the right children.
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the government should pay attention to children’s access to social networks.
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create a positive and productive learning environment for young people.
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issues will be reduced by regularly
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in good deeds for the good of society.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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