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Computers are becoming an essential part of education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#computers #part #education
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It is considered that
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 are getting a vital share of learning in
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 life because
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technology
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 has improved in recent years. There are some people who still think that studying without any technical devices (
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 as
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) is important every time. The main reason is getting accustomed
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.
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 his studies with
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 during school years, he may
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 to use only that thing, he will be a little lazy to write his notebooks or he may
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conforts
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 in memorizing. Most people feel that
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 are becoming not essential , they know despite the significance of lessons are teaching with
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 are just updating, ordinary lessons never
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loose
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its
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 importance.
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 , we can face modern teaching systems all over the world which consists of projectors or
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 , they are more relevant to the current time and being
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 necessary part of schooling. It is easier with
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 to learn something new and
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help
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 us to solve
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 of lessons.
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, one
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neighbor
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 is studying at
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a president
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president
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 school where is provided with technical support by the government authorities tells me all the time
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that
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 possibilities of
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 . We do not need
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 previous tactics in the school system or higher education , through the usage of
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 can give us lots of opportunities of modern life and help us in improving our knowledge . To recapitulate,
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 some people feel that
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 only affect students' learning and brain, I wholeheartedly agree with
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 tendency, how can not
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 use
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 kind of
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 if it gives us more success and happiness ?!
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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