Bullying is a big problem in many schools. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Violence

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is a major

problem

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schools

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nowadays and it has increased in recent years. These days, there are many violent videos posted on the internet and it is very terrible. The main reasons for bullying are the

school

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's environment, social

media

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effect and negligence by

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, many

parents

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have blamed the violent

media

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for causing

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violence

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. Television programs and Hollywood movies with shooting and killing scenes have appeared so many times. These violent scenes look so attractive and they are rewarded by the public

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of punished.

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explains why children who view those are becoming violent.

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, violent video games

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help with

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the same way movies do.

Students

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may have problems understanding what is real and what is fake.

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schools

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play an important role in the cause of

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violence

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. A

school

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is a place where children are taught the right things in life and

students

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have always had to face study pressures and arguments with other

students

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, being bullied and teased by others can often lead to violent revenge or retribution.

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makes

students

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feel insulted and it is easy to act without thinking. As we can see

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the newspaper or social

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factor showed up frequently in

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violence

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nowadays. Lack of monitoring by

parents

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is another reason for

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violence

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behaviour. To overcome

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problem

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, teachers and

parents

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should support them and teach

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right things to do.

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schools

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should organise outdoor activities for

students

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so that they can communicate with each other and make friends. In conclusion,

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should be a safe environment for learning and developing, but

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it is not as safe as it used to be. The causes of

violence

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schools

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are including

media

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school

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and family.

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violence

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can be prevented by the

teachers

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and

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support and

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can play an important role to overcome

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

Bullying
Harassment
Intimidation
Diversity
Adolescent
Mimic
Aggressive behavior
Cyberbullying
Peer pressure
Social acceptance
Awareness
Conflict resolution
Peer mediation
Consequences
Respect
Kindness
Open communication
Vulnerable
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Bullying is a big problem in many schools. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Fully explain your ideas

Write a letter to a company asking for a refund for something you bought from them online. Write a letter to the customer service department. In your letter:  Describe the item you bought  Outline what the problem is  Explain why you want a refund

It is much easier to learn in a small class than in a larger one. To what extent that do you agree or disagree?

The rise of social media platforms has made easier for people to vent their frustration and complaints publicly. What are advantages and disadvantages of such a trend?

100.In many countries, the traditional family structure is changing, and an increasing number of children are being raised by single parents or by grandparents. Discuss the possible reasons for this trends and its potential consequences in society.