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Some people think that keeping pets is good for children, while others think it is dangerous and unhealthy for them. Which viewpoint do you agree with?

#people #pets #children
From ancient times,
animals
 live in
people
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accommodation
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accommodations
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.
Thus
, many
people
 suppose that
pets
 are
great
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a great
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companion
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companions
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 for their children, while others are
concern
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 that keeping
animals
 at home could be risky. In my point of view,
although
to
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having
pets
 could be traumatic, I
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believe
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belive
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believe
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 that
pets
 have lots of benefits for kids.
First
 of all, the
people
 who had
pets
 in their childhood are usually more responsible,
comunicative
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communicative
communication
 and have
less
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 fears of
wild
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 world than others.
Pets
 are
significant
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 important for youth in their growing up.
In other words
, kids always
communacate
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communicate
 with
animals
 as
equal
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, sometimes as
a
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apply
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friends
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friend
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, they could spend
lot
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a lot
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 of time outside with them, play with them or walk around and meet new friends with other
pets
.
Secondly
, if a kid
have
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has
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 a dog or a cat he
learn
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learns
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 to be respectful to them
,
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 because
animals
 do not allow
to
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them to
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 beating them or sometimes could hurt
him
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his
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return
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in return
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.
Finally
, living with
animals
since
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from
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 young age
lead
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leads
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 to less stress and
frears
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fears
 in the future. Because the adults with
aknowledge
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knowledge
a knowledge
 of
animals
behavior
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behaviour
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trully
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truly
 understand the reasons of
pets
agression
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aggression
 and what should do for avoiding that kind of situations. On the other
hands
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hand
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, I
deffinatelly
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definitely
 understand
people
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people's
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 concerns that having domestic
animals
 could be dangerous for kids. There is a fact that some of the
pets
such
 as
cat
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cats
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, dogs or rats
capable
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are capable
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 of offensive.
However
, that animal's
behavior
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behaviour
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 always
have
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has
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 the natural reasons they try to protect themselves.
Thus
, there is a responsibility of parents to learn their children to be careful and respectful. Another disadvantage could be
a
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psycological
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psychological
 trauma
connect
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connected
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 with
death
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the death
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 of
pets
. Some adults remember their
pet's
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pets '
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lost
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loss
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 so clearly
so
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that
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 they do not allow
to
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them to
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 have the same experience for their children. There is a tough decision for everyone and there could not be a right answer. To sum up, while the
pets
 could lead to trauma and dangerous situations I personally believe that all these situations might be happened because of ignorance and misunderstanding of
animal's
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the animal's
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 world.
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