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Crime rates will fall as advances in technology make it easier to detect and prevent crimes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The rates of crime had been increasing in the present.
However
, it is predicted that the
numbers
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 of crimes will
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 due to high technology which
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didual
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visual
 that will be helpful in saving a case is recorded in a computer system. These data
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etecting
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detecting
 and preventing violation much convenient. I firmly agree with the above statement and my reasons will be discussed in the following paragraphs. Computer machinery makes information about the suspect more accessible. To explain, most of the data about an
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 birth,
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 name of the person, SIN number, and even the
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 and height of the offender
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will be helpful in proving identity.
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,
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technonology
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technology
 is beneficial in detecting crimes.
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, it
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 in slowing down the significant rise of
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 in
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society. Take surveillance cameras
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 example, it is a great tool in
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deterring
 burglars and thieves in the community. Having one of these give the people the peace of mind that their homes and business establishments are secured. Most businesses and houses have these because they are effective and cheap. In conclusion, with the significant rise in
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 of
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 in
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society, advanced technology played a vital role in regulating the numbers of
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 as well as proving the identity of the suspect.
That is
 why we must continue to take advantage of these benefits.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crime deterrent
  • high-tech surveillance
  • facial recognition systems
  • omnipresence
  • deter
  • digital forensics
  • ballistic testing
  • revolutionize
  • exonerate
  • root causes
  • social inequality
  • invasion of privacy
  • civil liberties
  • surveillance
  • data collection
  • negative implications
  • cybercrime
  • hacking
  • identity theft
  • online fraud
  • cybersecurity
  • vulnerabilities
  • exploit
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