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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subjects. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#universities #numbers #students #subjects
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In the
last
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 few decades, the number of
students
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 has been experiencing an
increase
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 trend, as well as major
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. In general, both male and female
students
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 have been distributed in various majors.
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, people often argued that colleges should have
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 application system in accepting
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 balance number of
students
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 based on their
gender
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. From my perspective, I admit that I agree with
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equal
numbers
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 of
gender
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 in
education
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 is essential to establish
gender
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 equality, and it
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 can make learning become more
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exiting
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 and meaningful.
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 with, educational institutions are the best place to maintain
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 balance in our society.
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 accepting equal
numbers
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 of female and male
students
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 in college, it means that we allowed
students
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 to get the same opportunity in learning new knowledge.
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,
education
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 institutions will show the best example to society how to develop
gender
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 equality.
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, nowadays engineering majors and some manly majors in university study are not only for men but
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 for women.
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, when we take a look at the job market, the equitable distribution of occupation based on
gender
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 has been started increasing.
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, the variety makes learning more enjoyable and substantial. Variety pushes
students
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 to learn from different and it is vital to growing the level of tolerance value of
students
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. I cannot imagine how boring and uninterested class is if the
students
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 are only
one
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 woman or man.
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, I have followed a field
education
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 program with
one
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 group learning with all the female
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. It was tough since we have limited accessibility and our thought were circled in the same perspective. To conclude, I believe that
one
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 of the best ways to build up our
education
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 system is through equal
numbers
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 of
students
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 based on their
gender
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 since the
first
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 it can support
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 equality which is currently,
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 of the social issues. And
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, it can boost fascinating learning.

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