Providing a national system in a country where the unemployed receive a regular payment only encourages people not to seek work and puts an unreasonable strain on a country's financial resources. Discuss this statement and give your opinion.

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Some countries consider amounts of money for unemployed
people
to support them. In
this
essay, I will mention some consequences of
this
attitude
then
followed by the reasoned conclusion. Nowadays, because of some reasons
such
as downturn, war, drought and lack of jobs due to increasing population,
governments
face a large population of unemployed citizens or a large
people
who have lost their jobs.
Therefore
governments
, as well as authorities, have to solve
this
problem in practical ways. They consider pensions for these
people
and payments regularly for them. In my opinion, it is the
first
and easiest solution to
this
problem. They can make new
job
opportunities and hire unemployed
people
.
For example
, in my country there are many mines which have not yet been exploited.so,
governments
can equip private companies with modern machines and tools
then
companies can hire unemployed
people
.
This
issue provides more benefits for the government. In fact, create a high potential cycle in countries' economy. Another solution is the education system. Training system must lead to students
also
new trainer to the most useful and needed the
job
.
For instance
, in Iran nursing is a required field of society if students tend to the nursing in fact their
job
be guaranteed in future. In conclusion, despite the existence of high pressure on financial resources cause the unemployed are pensioned.I completely agree with
this
sentence that,
Governments
have an important responsibility for them and should provide suitable conditions for their's
job
also
their insurance or other normal benefits, until supply their needs.
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