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the worldwide market share of the notebook computer market for manufacturers between 2006 and 2007.

The given table illustrates the worldwide
market
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share
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 of the notebook computer
market
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 for manufacturers between 2006 and 2007. Overall, it is clear that while HP,Dell and Toshiba experienced an increase in their
market
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 proportion, that of other companies showed a downward trend. According to the table,in 2006, HP indicated the highest amount of
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 percentage,with about 31.4%,higher than that of Dell by almost one time. The figure rose steadily to 34% in 2007.
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, There was a sharp increase in the proportion of Dell and Toshiba, between 2006 and 2007,while Dell’s numbers grew moderately by 3.6% to 20.2% and Toshiba’s figure rose slightly by 1.1% to 7.3% in the same period.
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, there was 11.6 % of acre’s
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 in 2006,but
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 figure dropped minimally to 10.7% in 2007.
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, Lenovo and Fujitsu-Siemens represented a mere decline, with the former falling from 6.6% in 2006 to 6.2% in 2007 and the latter decreasing by 2.5% to 2.3% for the period.
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, the percentage of the other companies
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 decrease from 22.8% to 19.3% over the period.

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