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Every year large number Of people migrate from one country to another for different reasons discussed the advantages and disadvantages Of migration for the individual and for society as a whole

#year #people #country #migration #society
It is undeniable that
people
 seek
for
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good
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a good
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opportunity
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opportunities
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, not to mention the opportunity to live abroad. The hope for creating
the
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 new overseas life has given some
people
 the urge to migrate as a worker,
student
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students
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, or even as
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a refugee
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refugee
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refugees
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. As reported by The Economist, enormous
people
 have migrated over the past decade
with
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 various reasons. In
this
 essay, I will explain the advantages and disadvantages of
migration
.
To begin
 with,
migration
 makes some
people
to
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get
the
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international exposure.
Therefore
, they can know other
culture
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cultures
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 and make them
to
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be more
open minded
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.
Moreover
, some countries offer
the
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excellent opportunities to study and work.
Thus
, those opportunities can broaden their knowledge and skill
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 has been beneficial to compete in the job market.
Additionally
,
migration
 enriches the destination country with more bright
people
 to develop them. Despite its advantages, it
also
 makes the country to be more populous. As a city get crowded, it produces the non-sense price of having a property,
such
 as
apartment
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 and landed house. Many
people
 cannot afford the housing and tend to rent for the rest of their life. Not only does it affect
to
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the house price, but it
also
 affects
to
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the quality of air. Having more
people
 means the carbon footprint will
also
 increase. As
people
 need to mobilize, the need
of
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 cars rises and makes the air contaminated with pollution. To be concluded, it is convinced that
migration
 has two sides of coins. The advantages and disadvantages of it can be regulated and more controlled if the government plays a role in
this
 phenomenon. Having more
people
 in a country means the carbon footprint will
also
 increase.
In
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other hand
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, the difference of cultures often occurs some racist acts towards each other. It is believed that
crowded
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 city contributes to the quality of life

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