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Every year large number Of people migrate from one country to another for different reasons discussed the advantages and disadvantages Of migration for the individual and for society as a whole

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In
recent
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decade
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, there are a massive influx of migrants in every nation around the world. They migrate
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overseas due to several reasons.
This
 phenomenon might cause some benefits and drawbacks to the person as
individual
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 and nation as a whole. In the following essay, I aim to develop the advantages
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this
 issue as well as the disadvantages.
To begin
 with, many countries suffer from
lack
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 of productive
labours
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 because
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the
birth’s
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 rate is quite small. Given the foreign workers, the need
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 labours in the nation can be solved.
For instance
, in Japan, they are difficult to hire new
staffs
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 because there are a small number of working age.
Furthermore
, folks who do a migration usually will have a high salary because hiring
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foreigners would cost a company a huge amount of money.
For instance
, research from Brawijaya University showed that international labours get
pay
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 almost twofold from local
staffs
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.
As a result
, the migrant population will have a better life. In stark contrast, there are some drawbacks following
this
 issue.
Firstly
, social issues
such
 as racism and bullying will likely
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happen due to the diversity which just happen in recent years. The local
people
 might see foreigners as a
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thread
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 to their country because the indigenous
people
 rarely appear in society.
Moreover
, the
expats
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 usually have to pay an expensive fee for
visa
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 and
also
 accommodation. There are several differences between local and migrate
people
 in terms of renting a settlement. By way of conclusion, the migration of
people
 witnesses several benefits along with some drawbacks. I suggest to the government in every country should wisely regulate
this
 issue since migrate
people
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 every year.

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