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the number of complaints made about noise to Environmental Health authorities in the city of new town between 1980 and 1996.

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The given line graph illustrates the
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 of
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 made about noise to Environmental Health authorities in the city of new town between 1980 and 1996. Overall, it is clear that the numbers of people complaining about domestic and household experienced a downward trend, while that of the other groups rose throughout the period. According to the graph, starting in 1980, the people rate the domestic and households as the sector that make them the noisiest.with about over 600
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,higher than that of the traffic noise by almost one time. The
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 steeply dropped to around only 50
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 after sixteen years.
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, the traffic noise indicated the least numbers of
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, its figure stayed flat at around 250
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 between 1980 and 1982. The figure fell slightly to 200
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 in 1983 and 1984 and
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 its amount rose dramatically to exactly 600
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 in 1996.
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, over the three years from 1980 to 1982, the
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 of road works flatted off at approximately 500
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, its amount fell a mere in 1983 and 1984;
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, following 1990 its amount grew significantly,reaching its peak at over 1200
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 in 1996.
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. There was an increase in the complaint
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 of factories over the period,rising from 400
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 to over 600
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.
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