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Several languages are in danger of extinction because they are spoken by very small numbers of people. Some people say that governments should spend public money on saving these languages, while others believe that would be a waste of money. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Languages
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 play a vital role in our societies
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 because it is the most important tool for communication with each other. There are different
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 be extinct, since a little number of citizens speak them. In
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 of
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 issue as governments should save them by spending
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 may waste our public
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, and explain why I feel it is important to preserve our
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. In fact, there are more efforts from different states, especially wealthier
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, to preserve them which may be extinct in the
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 our planet as making campaigns, establishing language competitions and
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 providing language scholarships for different
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 of students. When they learn these various
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 keeping for many decades.
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, some people believe that if governments had to spend a lot of
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 to keep them in our minds,
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 would have lost
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 the same time, our communities need
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 for important essential developments.
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 traffic system and education system.
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 will disappear, when they are not important for our societies and we do not need
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. So, why
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 is spent for them? In conclusion, there are two arguments for protecting
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 from disappearing by spending more
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. Of course, it's it may take a lot of
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, but in the long
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 it is important to save our
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 heritage whatever it costs.
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