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A growing numbe rof people feels that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have same rights as humans,while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including use for food and research

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For centuries,
animals
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 have been used by
humans
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 in some form or another to satisfy their needs.
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, some people accept that
animals
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 should be treated well,
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 others believe that
animals
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 should be used to provide human necessities
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 as food, clothing, and medical
research
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 studies. In my opinion, we should not exploit
animals
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 for our needs; they should have the same rights as
humans
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.
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 with,
humans
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 think that they are the most important creatures in the world and everything is done for their survival. We are exploiting
animals
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 for all our needs,
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 as food and medical
research
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. We are doing experiments on
animals
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 so that we can fight and cure diseases.
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, we are training
animals
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 for our fun in the circus as well as using animal skin for manufacturing leather bags, shoes, and clothes.
Humans
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 will satisfy their taste buds by eating
animals
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.
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, I believe that by exploiting the
animals
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, we are destroying the balance of nature.
Humans
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 should not use
animals
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 for their necessities.
Humans
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 should start adopting the vegan trend. Of course, it is difficult for a few people, but we should all know the importance of eating vegetarian.
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, despite doing medical
research
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 on
animals
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, scientists should use the latest technology for
research
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 about diseases. They
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 argue that though
animals
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 are driven by instinct rather than the brain like
humans
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, they are still living creatures and should enjoy their lives in peace. To conclude, we should control
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 usage and regulate it firmly. Misusing
animals
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 like in circuses, zoos, or illegal competitions should be completely prohibited since those activities are solely aimed at fun and mere financial benefits, disregarding
animals
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' suffering.

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