Some people believe that eventually all jobs will be done by artificial intelligence robots. What is your opinion?

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Thanks to the development of

technology

, which makes us more efficient to do many

jobs

. Is it true? Some people argue that all vacancies can be solved by the advance of technologies using

robots

However

, I believe that some

jobs

still require

humans

This

essay will describe the reasons deeply. It is true that the development of

technology

enable

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humans

to replace some

jobs

. Risky

jobs

such

as firefighters or pilots are replaced using

robots

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apply

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because those

jobs

are dangerous and

robots

can do better.

Also

jobs

that need automation

such

as data processors can completed by

robots

. The opening of bank accounts,

nowadays

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has nowadays

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been replaced by machines to make them more fast and

also

efficient, nowadays become more common.

However

, a job that needs active interactions,

such

as teachers, or related decision making still needs

humans

Firstly

, it because related to many aspects of feelings.

For example

, to teach children in playgroup or elementary school, they need attention and understanding from their teacher, which can't replaced by

technology

Furthermore

jobs

related to decision-making,

such

as CEO of a company. Usually, to decide something they

also

need experiences and

also

considerations, which these didn't have by

robots

. These

robots

, only use algorithms that

programmed

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by the programmers to analyse past actions and not including the value of feelings,

such

as sad and happiness. In conclusion, the advance of

technology

indeed has brought many benefits to

humans

, including finishing tasks or assignments.

However

, I strongly believe that not all

jobs

can be replaced by machines, especially related to feelings and decisions.

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Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

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Task Achievement: 6.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

Artificial Intelligence (AI)
Automation
Workplace automation
Human intuition
Job displacement
Collaborative robots (Cobots)
Skill adaptation
Ethical considerations
Economic implications
Fully automated workforce
Human-machine collaboration
Technological advancements
Creative industries
Empathy
Socio-economic impact

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