Some people think that it is important to use leisure time for activities that improve the mind, such as reading and doing word puzzles. Other people feel that it is important to rest the mind during leisure time. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Some individuals claim
that is
crucial to utilize leisure activities
that improve the brain, such
as reading and forming jigsaw puzzles. However
, others think that it is imperative to rest the mind
while having a
spare time.
Correct article usage
apply
To begin
with, reading and doing word puzzles improve cognitive
Correct article usage
the cognitive
mind
especially
for retirees. According to research, reading books and doing puzzles regularly Add the comma(s)
,especially
such
as cross word
or soduko games, are ways to enhance the brain and eliminate neurodegenerative problems Correct your spelling
crossword
such
as dementia and alzheimers
. Change the capitalization
Alzheimers
Alzheimer's
This
Correct pronoun usage
These
are
testedChange the verb form
is
to
several individuals who are not working especially the elderly. Change preposition
on
Thus
, they are proven to eliminate the early onset of dementia for young and elderly people.
On the other hand
, others argued that it is better to rest the mind
. This
is true to
some individuals who worked in highly stressful jobs like doctors, engineers and lawyers who utilized their brains often at work. These people engage in physical Change preposition
for
activities
such
as running, walking, hiking, and other physical sports acitivities
that would help them to destress from daily Correct your spelling
activities
activities
. These activities
assist them to maintain a healthy mind
and body. As a result
, they are productive to
their work.
In conclusion, having Change preposition
in
a leisure
Correct the article-noun agreement
leisure activities
a leisure activity
activities
whether it is physical or not are beneficial for mind
and body. In my opinion, I believe that they are essential to improve the brain to eliminate neurodegenerative problems Correct article usage
the mind
such
as dementia or other cognitive mind
problems.Submitted by marilyelvira on
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