Some people think that it is important to use leisure time for activities that improve the mind, such as reading and doing word puzzles. Other people feel that it is important to rest the mind during leisure time. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
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that is
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activities
that improve the brain, Use synonyms
such
as reading and forming jigsaw puzzles. Linking Words
However
, others think that it is imperative to rest the Linking Words
mind
while having Use synonyms
a
spare time.
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apply
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with, reading and doing word puzzles improve Linking Words
cognitive
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the cognitive
mind
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especially
for retirees. According to research, reading books and doing puzzles regularly Add the comma(s)
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cross word
or soduko games, are ways to enhance the brain and eliminate neurodegenerative problems Correct your spelling
crossword
such
as dementia and Linking Words
alzheimers
. Change the capitalization
Alzheimers
Alzheimer's
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This
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These
are
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is
to
several individuals who are not working especially the elderly. Change preposition
on
Thus
, they are proven to eliminate the early onset of dementia for young and elderly people.
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On the other hand
, others argued that it is better to rest the Linking Words
mind
. Use synonyms
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some individuals who worked in highly stressful jobs like doctors, engineers and lawyers who utilized their brains often at work. These people engage in physical Change preposition
for
activities
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such
as running, walking, hiking, and other physical sports Linking Words
acitivities
that would help them to destress from daily Correct your spelling
activities
activities
. These Use synonyms
activities
assist them to maintain a healthy Use synonyms
mind
and body. Use synonyms
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to
their work.
In conclusion, having Change preposition
in
a leisure
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leisure activities
a leisure activity
activities
whether it is physical or not are beneficial for Use synonyms
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mind
and body. In my opinion, I believe that they are essential to improve the brain to eliminate neurodegenerative problems Correct article usage
the mind
such
as dementia or other cognitive Linking Words
mind
problems.Use synonyms
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