Many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities. Does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages.
Work
culture has changed drastically in recent years. While some believe that working day and night is beneficial due to the appreciation and respect that comes with it, I would strongly argue that withdrawing from hobbies and interests can be detrimental for
mental health.
On the one hand, those who think working long hours has more upsides might argue that it makes them feel appreciated and respected Change preposition
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their colleagues and their employer. Change preposition
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This
is because of the assumption that the people who work
longer are hard working
and loyal to their employer. Correct your spelling
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For example
, employees who work
till late night
usually get better perks and bonuses from their employer.
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On the other hand
, I firmly believe that if you do not have any time to pursue your hobbies and interests, it could have a huge impact on your mental well-being. Hobbies play a vital role in relaxing the mind and releiving
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. But if there is no time for these fun activities, your mind will not get a chance to de-stress leading to damage your
mental health and causing depression. Change preposition
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For instance
, most working class
people in Japan are depressed due to poor Add a hyphen
working-class
work
-life balance. In contrast
, if these employees spent some time on
playing a sport or working out, it would improve their physical as well as mental health.
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although
working long hours might be help
your reputation and provide some extra perks, leisure activities are vital to mental well-being and to avoid depression as they aid in de-stressing the mind after Change the verb form
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite