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The prevention of health problems and illness is more important than treatment and medicine. Government funding should reflect this. To what extent do you agree?

Currently,
health
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 has always been the
center
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 of the debate, especially when the
governments
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 failed to prevent coronavirus from spreading all around the world, causing them billions of dollars to treat and
cure
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 infected victims. So, it is safe to say that funding in
prevention
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 methods is a wiser option, but
governments
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 should not neglect serious disease treatment either. It goes without saying that
prevention
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 is better than
cure
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. Scientifically, human
health
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 can be reinforced by varied approaches
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 as eating with a balanced diet, exercising, or meditating, so that the chance of suffering an illness is lower, and they will not have to feel pain or spend a large amount of
money
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 on treatments and medicines.
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, the government should invest more
money
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 in raising people’s awareness and knowledge by opening more
health
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 classes so that diseases that are time,
money
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 consuming, and arduous to
cure
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 like cancer or AIDS can be somewhat prevented.
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, if the
governments
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 do not fund enough
money
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 on aiding treatments or medical research,
this
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 could lead to catastrophe. People with serious
health
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 issues could face a death sentence if local hospitals do not have enough medicines or facilities. Take France as an example, they did not have the oxygen tanks necessary for people diagnosed with Covid-19 to use,
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, many patients died without having treatment. Not to mention there many
health
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 problems that existed without a proper
cure
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, the government should consider investing an understandable amount of
money
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 to find an easier way to treat those diseases, and developing medicines that have fewer side effects to make patients suffer less pain than they have to. To conclude,
prevention
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 is undoubtedly offered more benefits than treatments but it is
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 wrong to solely invest in
prevention
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 alone.
Governments
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 around the globe should know how to invest in both in a reasonable way.

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