Some people think that technology makes life complex, so we should make our life simpler without using technology. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In today’s world, it is believed by a part of the population that the complexity that
technology
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brings is unnecessary and we should simplify our
life
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by getting rid of them.
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essay disagrees with
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claim because
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has brought us convenience more than anything else and it is impossible to imagine our
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without them. 100 years ago,
life
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was indeed so much simpler than today.
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, without the help of
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; transportation, communication, and many more services were extremely poor and hard to access. So no one can deny that
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has revolutionized all those basic aspects; now we can travel to the other side of the world with just a few hours, see and talk to each other with just a few clicks. It is true that
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can somewhat turn our
life
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just a bit more complicated,
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the end, it
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makes our daily basics simpler yet much more efficient than ever before.
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,
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without wonderful machinery no doubt is challenging as
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a human
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has already got familiar with using them every single day. If we wipe out
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an everyday
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object
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like
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smartphones
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,
laptop
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laptops
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,
car
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, and bullet
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trains
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, the economy would
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collapse
within a few days due to the fact that a huge number of jobs are currently relying on
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.
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, no sooner had the
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mobile phone
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born than companies and factories started to rise.
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gave millions of
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citizens
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an opportunity to have a job and put their
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standard higher than before. To conclude, it is safe to say that there is no point in making
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simpler by throwing away
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and we should thank them for giving us numerous
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merits in the
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place.
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