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Students today can easily access information online, so libraries are no longer necessary. Do you agree or disagree?

#students #access #information #libraries
Advancement
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 in technology made our life very easy. The prime example of
this
 is the
internet
 which
have
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 a wide variety of data available. Some believe
libraries
 are no longer needed as all the books and
information
 are available online. But the idea of eliminating the library is still not practical and
i
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 totally disagree with the statement and will justify my statement in upcoming paragraphs On the one hand, where all books are very easily accessible an individual only need a device like
smartphone
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a smartphone
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 or a tablet and an
internet
 connection to access it. Where
libraries
 charge people monthly to access it anyone can use the
internet
 to obtain their desired
information
 without any charges. People can get gain
information
 anytime anywhere without any help of anyone with just a few clicks they can have all data they need
On the other hand
, traditional
libraries
 have their own importance in today's society.
Libraries
 provide the environment for students to study in their free time. Library
are
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a
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places where students meet with their friends and study together without any disturbance.
Libraries
 still play a vital role in our society. To conclude,
although
 because of
internet
libraries
 seems outdated I believe it's not true and still holds the
information
 and
also
 provides a soothing atmosphere to the students to concentrate on their studies
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessible information
  • online databases
  • e-books
  • educational websites
  • community centers
  • physical books
  • literacy programs
  • peer-reviewed resources
  • misleading information
  • digital divide
  • high-speed internet
  • underprivileged communities
  • custodians of culture
  • archival material
  • conducive environment
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