In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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human needs is having a place to stay and live
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we either can
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a home or renting one. Owning a home is not been easy for anyone in some countries recently because of
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limitation
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. Aside from that,
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price
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has been gone up for many years and most likely
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will always increase for some years ahead.
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situation has changed
people
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from owning
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to
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a
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or living in an apartment.
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rich
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the rich
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people
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in some countries have more than two
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in which they can sell
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higher prices in the future.
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have been seen as
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that will get a high return for them.
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, other
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can not afford a
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due to a decrease
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house
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supply.
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wealth
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person
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can own a site
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.
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, the availability of
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in some countries is limited so it affected the
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house
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housing
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supply.
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availability has been an issue for some years
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where most of the
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has been used to build offices, shops, and malls.
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productivity is getting lower as the buildings that have been built is not occupied enough.
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issue can be solved by building apartments but for some
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owning a site
house
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is more comfortable to live and having a neighbourhood is the good one. To conclude
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negative situation will get worse if the government do not take any actions by creating policy towards housing.
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government
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the government
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should
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tax
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for those who have more than two and
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a reluctant price for those who just started to own their
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house
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.
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to that, the apartment price and availability should be monitored and the government can collaborate with developers to develop affordable
houses
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for the
people
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