In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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One of

basic

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human needs is having a place to stay and live

which

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we either can

owning

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own

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a home or renting one. Owning a home is not been easy for anyone in some countries recently because of

land

limitation

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limitations

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. Aside from that,

house

price

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prices

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has been gone up for many years and most likely

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will always increase for some years ahead.

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this

situation has changed

people

from owning

home

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a home

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rent

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renting

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house

or living in an apartment.

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, most

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rich

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the rich

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people

in some countries have more than two

houses

in which they can sell

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higher prices in the future.

Houses

have been seen as

a profitable assets

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that will get a high return for them.

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this

, other

people

can not afford a

house

due to a decrease

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house

supply.

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wealth

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person

who

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can own a site

house

Second

, the availability of

land

in some countries is limited so it affected the

house

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housing

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supply.

Land

availability has been an issue for some years

backward

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where most of the

land

has been used to build offices, shops, and malls.

Land

productivity is getting lower as the buildings that have been built is not occupied enough.

However

this

issue can be solved by building apartments but for some

people

owning a site

house

is more comfortable to live and having a neighbourhood is the good one. To conclude

that

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this

negative situation will get worse if the government do not take any actions by creating policy towards housing.

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government

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the government

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should

monitoring

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tax

houses

for those who have more than two and

giving

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a reluctant price for those who just started to own their

first

house

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to that, the apartment price and availability should be monitored and the government can collaborate with developers to develop affordable

houses

for the

people

Tue Mar 08 2022

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