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Some scientists recommend that formal education should start at the age of 4 or 5. In other countries it is recommended that formal education should start at 6 or 7. Discuss and give your opinion.

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Education
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 is one of the most effective ways to alleviate a country from poverty and inequality.
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, the government is trying their best to revise their policies related to
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. One of them is to determine
children
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's
age
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 for commending formal
education
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. According to the experts,
children
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 should start their primary
school
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 at the
age
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 of around 4 or 5.
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 kind of statement is triggering controversies.
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 explanation will be discussed in the paragraph below. In developing, countries especially Indonesia,
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 is becoming a weapon in the long term to guide Indonesia in achieving its goals.
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, a handful of scientists believe that youngsters should get an investment in
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 earlier as possible. The more of
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 who graduated at an early
age
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 results better than delaying
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 from attending the primary schools even though it is only 1 or 2
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.
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, some countries are against the idea of scientists. They
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 "If we put a student to formal
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 in the early
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such
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 as at the
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 of 4 or 5 might cause a mental illness in their childhood era.".
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, postponing the
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 to enter
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 just 1 and 2
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 to 6 to 7
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 old doesn't have a big impact on the country to achieve their goals. In my opinion, I completely agree with
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 statement.
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, the earlier someone for attending the schools could affect
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' leisure time. At
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age
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, what
children
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 need the most is how to enjoy their free time without thinking about their
school
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 life. Based on the psychology perspective, I believe that
students
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 are not ready yet to start their formal
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 if they commending the
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 less than 6
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 old.
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, I strongly believe that youngsters should start
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 at the
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 of 6 or 7. I agree that people between the
age
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 of 6 and 7 are mentally ready to enter the
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 and naturally know about the responsibility of a student.
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, in Indonesia, the law of
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 states that
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 should be more than 6
years
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 old to register the
school
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.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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