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Some scientists recommend that formal education should start at the age of 4 or 5. In other countries it is recommended that formal education should start at 6 or 7. Discuss and give your opinion.

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Education
 is one of the most effective ways to alleviate a country from poverty and inequality.
Hence
, the government is trying their best to revise their policies related to
education
. One of them is to determine
children
's
age
 for commending formal
education
. According to the experts,
children
 should start their primary
school
 at the
age
 of around 4 or 5.
This
 kind of statement is triggering controversies.
Further
 explanation will be discussed in the paragraph below. In developing, countries especially Indonesia,
education
 is becoming a weapon in the long term to guide Indonesia in achieving its goals.
Therefore
, a handful of scientists believe that youngsters should get an investment in
education
 earlier as possible. The more of
students
 who graduated at an early
age
 results better than delaying
children
 from attending the primary schools even though it is only 1 or 2
years
.
On the other hand
, some countries are against the idea of scientists. They
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 "If we put a student to formal
education
 in the early
age
such
 as at the
age
 of 4 or 5 might cause a mental illness in their childhood era.".
In addition
, postponing the
students
 to enter
school
 just 1 and 2
years
 to 6 to 7
years
 old doesn't have a big impact on the country to achieve their goals. In my opinion, I completely agree with
this
 statement.
Moreover
, the earlier someone for attending the schools could affect
students
' leisure time. At
this
age
, what
children
 need the most is how to enjoy their free time without thinking about their
school
 life. Based on the psychology perspective, I believe that
students
 are not ready yet to start their formal
education
 if they commending the
school
 less than 6
years
 old.
Consequently
, I strongly believe that youngsters should start
school
 at the
age
 of 6 or 7. I agree that people between the
age
 of 6 and 7 are mentally ready to enter the
school
 and naturally know about the responsibility of a student.
Besides
, in Indonesia, the law of
education
 states that
students
 should be more than 6
years
 old to register the
school
.

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