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Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what way has the technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development?

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In the modern-day era, many
people
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 have used noble means of
communication
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 and interaction. Technology is known to have had a huge impact on the mentioned phenomenon. Herein, the ways by which socialization has changed will be discussed and reasons
why I think it is a negative development
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, why I think it is a negative development,
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 will have been provided. On the one hand, change in the methods of
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 can bring advantages for some reasons.
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, technology has benefitted different aspects of civilized societies with frantic pace and
communication
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 is not an exception. High-tech means of
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 as well as social media,
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 as Facebook and Instagram, has made mankind able to be fed up with news just as they happen.
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, the importance of ease which is brought by technological
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 cannot be overlooked.
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 ease has led to the provocation of
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 from old fashioned styles of friendships
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 as being pen pal, toward more modernized ones, namely followers.
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,
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 getting used to fraternizing via these cutting-edge methods.
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, some reverberations of
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 trend should be mentioned as well. Mainly, it is proven that
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 having virtual life experiences will be so immature, naïve and wet behind the ears when it comes to
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 experiences. A person who has always been chatting with
people
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, as an ultimate example, may find it hard to socialize with others in their
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 confrontation. Yet, rarely these
people
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 are unable to find a way to find another means of
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 of talking, they are not
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 to a severe problem. In conclusion, ease of use and
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 pace which are directly provided by the advancement of technology can be mentioned to be of overriding importance when compared with its unlikely minor problems.

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  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

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  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • technology
  • interact
  • relationships
  • connectivity
  • communication
  • online
  • face-to-face
  • friendships
  • romantic relationships
  • family dynamics
  • positive
  • negative
  • development
  • effects
  • formation
  • ease
  • impacts
  • communities
  • connect
  • interaction
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