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You are in a hospital with a broken leg. Your colleagues have sent you get well soon greeting cards and gifts. Write a letter to them and include: Thank them for everything Explain how you spend time in the hospital Inform them about your recovery process

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Dear colleagues. Thanks a lot for showering gratitude amidst your tight schedule. I feel blessed. I am really happy for all of you. To be honest, I forgot my all injuries,
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 your care and affection. It gives motivates me. In
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 way, I want to be with all of you. So it is quite boring at the hospital. And almost every day is the same. In the morning, the expert and nurse came to my room. And
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 they check if I have taken the pills. In the middle of the day, I can watch something on the television like TV shows, movies or different news.
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, these days are given the opportunity raise to awareness for me. During the day, I read a number of books. In the afternoons, I have a nap.
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, the doctor for the evening
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 my health. I tried to befriend the nurse, and sometimes when I feel tedious, I talk with the nurse late.
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 I fall asleep. Thank genuine trauma in my leg, the doctor said that I should pay serious attention to my leg for a long time. So, the doctor has advised me not to strain the leg. I have to follow up with physiotherapy. It will take about 6 or 7 weeks for a complete recovery. Look forward to seeing you. Best regards. Lucy.

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coherence and cohesion
Try to improve the logical flow between your ideas and ensure that each paragraph focuses on one main theme.
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Make sure to maintain a more formal tone, especially in a professional context like a letter to colleagues.
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Consider varying your sentence structure to enhance readability and express your thoughts more clearly.
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You expressed genuine gratitude and appreciation towards your colleagues, which adds a positive touch to your letter.
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You provided clear details about your daily routine in the hospital, which helps us understand your experience better.
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