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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

#minutes #people #climate #change
Due to irreparable
climate
change
 in
this
 day and
age
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 some
people
 argue that
people
 should search
a
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for a
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method to live with
differentiate
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 weather rather than protecting it. Regarding
this
, I strongly disagree with
this
 assertion as
people
 cannot survive with the serious changing
of
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climate
. There are certain reasons.
Firstly
, if there are devastating
flood
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floods
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 and
drought
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droughts
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 owing to
climate
change
,
people
 cannot survive
in
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 the emerald earth. In fact,
water
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 surface has already increased, and it has affected the ecosystem.
For instance
, a survey conducted by the Korea Scientific Foundation has revealed that
ice
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 age will come back if humans cannot stop changing weather.
Therefore
, it is evident that if human beings
are fail
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 to prevent
climate
change
, they will be
extincted
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extinct
 in the world.
Secondly
, as there are certain ways to protect the earth from
climate
change
, individuals have to do their best, and living with fluctuating
climate
 is the
last
 choice when the world population have no way to prevent it. Not only can the
comsuption
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consumption
 of
fossi
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fossil
 fuels
are
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 reduced by the public with using public
transportaion
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transportation
,
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it may
also
decreased
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decrease
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 by
government
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the government
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 to allocate state funds to develop eco-friendly energy.
For example
,
recent
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the recent
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 environmental report would seem to suggest that
preventions
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 can apparently
dely
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delay
defy
 the disaster of
climate
change
.
otherwise
,
people
 cannot provide
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environment
environemnt
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to
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 the
next
 generation. As the example clearly illustrates, it is reasonable to say that they should not give up to protect the earth for children. In conclusion,
although
people
 cannot completely stop changing
climate
, they should postpone it as much as they can for the
next
 generation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • climate resilience
  • mitigation measures
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • renewable energy
  • carbon footprint
  • sustainable practices
  • infrastructure adaptation
  • displaced communities
  • economic incentives
  • public health
  • international agreements
  • environmental regulations
  • biodiversity
  • future generations
  • green technology
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