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Logging of the rain forests is a serious problem and it may lead to the extinction of animal life and human life. Do you agree or disagree?

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Forest is compelling natural energy.Cutting down the
trees
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 cause global warming and the extinction of living
creatures
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.I agreed with the statement if the rain
forests
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 are cut down which have a huge impact on the
earth
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's atmosphere as well as animals which are living in the forest.
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,if the
trees
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 are cut down in the
forests
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 there is a huge impact on the
earth
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's temperature.As for the
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researchers the
earth
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's temperature increased dramatically when compared to the
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 20 years.Because the public is cutting down the
trees
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 for agricultural purposes and
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 civilization.these results in an increase in global warming and cause a rise in the temperature. In ,addition the human being is cutting down
trees
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 for cultivation purpose
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 lead to extinction in the living
creatures
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.Rain provinces are
habitation
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 for flora and fauna.Clearing these forest result in the birds and animals becoming homeless.
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, Amazon has a large living
habitation
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 when compared to other
forests
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 on
earth
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.Recently the government took a project on clearing the amazon for human
habitation
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 which resulted in the death of many birds.So, cutting down the
trees
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 lead to the death of living
creatures
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 and when the animals or birds don't have a place to live they die gradually.So In order to stop ,
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 the government made new ideas for human
habitation
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.
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,later communities do campaign on the issue later the government backed down. In conclusion,there is a huge loss when the
forests
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 are cut down.It causes global warming and the extinction of old living
creatures
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,In order to stop
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 nation do campaigns and make awareness programmes that the society know about the consequences of the logging of
forests
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.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • deforestation
  • biodiversity
  • ecosystem
  • carbon sink
  • global warming
  • indigenous tribes
  • livelihood
  • displacement
  • cultural erosion
  • soil erosion
  • water cycle
  • humidity levels
  • rainfall patterns
  • droughts
  • ecosystem services
  • pollination
  • climate change
  • logging
  • rain forests
  • habitats
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