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Most people think that the truth should be objective rather than subjective when it comes to the news. Do you think all news is true? What is the function of a newspaper?

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Society believes that the
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 legitimacy must be subject-oriented. Nowadays,
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 comes from various sources like
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 and that makes me question their legitimacy.
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,
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 are the source of a plethora of literature, making their purposes varied. The
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 nowadays is served for political agenda by some politicians, making the truth questioned.
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, its contents were arranged to make their figures look good in public.
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,
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 contents were made as a tool to take their opponents down.
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, the
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 is likely to serve as a tool or propaganda, rather than as a medium for delivering important events. To give an example, there was a government election that happened recently in Indonesia that was counted by the
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 media.
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, on the day where the votes are being counted, some of them are showing a fake quick count of those votes by making a politician win.
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, public opinions are being narrated into viewing them as a strong figure.
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 is evidence that the
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 validity is false.
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 the medium for delivering the
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 varied, one of them is the
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.
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 served to deliver the job portal in offline mode, making it very useful.
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,
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also
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 can be used by people who want to sell their used goods.
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, in 2017,
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 from Kompas were advertising various jobs. A
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 illustration is from recently when it became a trending topic among netizens because some antiques that could not be found on the internet are being sold there. Both events are evidence that
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 have various content that makes them very useful for societies. In general, I believe that
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 nowadays serves as politicians’ tools for making them more powerful and it
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 can be found in the newspaper.
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,
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also
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 have a plethora of content, making them
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 useful for general purposes. Most people think that the truth should be objective rather than subjective when it comes to the
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.

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task achievement
While the essay addresses both parts of the prompt, the argument about the truthfulness of news could be developed further with more specific examples or evidence. This would make the response more comprehensive.
coherence cohesion
Work on improving the logical flow between each paragraph. For example, transition sentences between ideas and paragraphs can help the reader follow your argument more easily.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each main point within your paragraphs is well-supported and clearly linked back to the overall argument. This will strengthen the coherence of your essay.
task achievement
The essay provides a clear stance on the issue by stating that news can be used as a political tool and argues for the various functions of newspapers.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion effectively frame the essay, giving it a complete structure.
task achievement
Specific examples are provided, making the arguments more tangible and relatable. However, these examples could be more elaborated to add depth to the essay.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • objective reporting
  • subjective interpretation
  • media bias
  • misinformation
  • journalistic integrity
  • editorial standards
  • fact-checking
  • watchdog role
  • public opinion
  • newsworthy
  • ethical journalism
  • credible sources
  • press freedom
  • sensationalism
  • media literacy
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